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People have different opinions on whether or not university students have to attend lessons requisitely. Regarding this, some assert that university students should be attend classes. However, I strongly believe that university students do not have to attend classes necessarily. I will further outline my argument below. To begin with, students should be able to choose whether or not they take classes. Not all classes are helpful. Some classes are useful but some lessons are not useful. Therefore, when students do not think the classes are valuable, they should be able to skip the classes. For instance, last year, I did not go a class where professor was inattentive to students and was not good at teaching. Instead, I studied the subject with textbook myself. Even though I did not attend the class, there was no impact on my grades. In this regard, it is obvious that university students should have autonomy in class participation. On top of that, there are other ways to study even if students are absent from classes. For example, students are able to make up the class with online course materials. In reality, majority of university in Korea provide online class platforms and many students take online classes when they do not attend classes. Therefore, students do not have to take classes necessarily. To sum up, not all classes are valuable and there are other ways to study instead of taking classes. For these reasons, university students should not be required to attend classes requisitely.
질문) 저번에 첨삭해주신것중에 질문이있는데용 On top of that, people can understand how the way to deal with problems in their society by investigating similar incidents occurred in other countries. 이 문장에서 왜 how는 안되는건가요?? how를 the way 라고 고쳐주셔서요ㅎㅎ
질문2) 저번에 첨삭해주신 건데용 To solve the problem, Korea government introduced laws through international examples from countries like the UK and Germany which had experienced similar problems before. Consequently, the number of illegal immigrant has decreased and the rights of migrant workers have become were guaranteed. 여기에서 한국정부가 과거에 비슷한 일을 겪었던 국가가 내세웠던 법을 도입했고 그래서 그 법을 도입한 이후에 불법체류자의 수가 줄어들어왔다 권리를 보장받아왔다 이런의미로 쓰려고 현재완료를 쓴거였는데 현재완료 쓰기에는 어색한 문장이라서 고쳐주신건가요?? 그냥 이 문맥에는 과거형이 더 어울리나요?? |