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┼ ▨ 푸른소나무님....문제점좀 적나라하게 찍어주셔여.. - 초보 ┼
│ (PR) Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
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│ Throught our life, we live in variety surrounding which receive the effect of good things. Some people prefer to live in a small town and others prefer to live in a big city.I prefer to live in a big city which ensure the job and large shopping center which is exciting places.
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│ First of all, a big city easily get the job which support to our life. there are many shop, shopping center, and places which give to good oppurtunity to work . these factors are many and we will achive to constant job. for example, four years ago, when I lived small town, there are no chance to work. therefore, I spend hard time because not received and have not money. After all, I decided to go a big city, and there are many people and many job as soon as I eisily get a job.
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│ Secondly, large shopping center which support to exciting place is many of comportable things. there are variety(=> various) shops and fast foods our life need because many people used to shopping center. In my friend case, when she go to trip a small city, she need some butters she can not buy. After all, to buy some butters go a big city in neighbor with car.
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│ To sup up, a big city easily get the job which support to our live and large shopping center which support to exciting place is many of comportable things. These reasons, I prefer to live in a big city.
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