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│ Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? All students should be required to study art and music in secondary school. Use specific reasons to support your answer.
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│ There is an argument concerning that secondary school students must study art and music. I strongly believe that high school students need to learn about art and music. As students learn aesthetics and music, they(=>this) could relieve their stress, find out their aptitude, and have some knowledge.
│ First and foremost, not only do both music and art provide the students time to relax, but they also protect against the mental disorder (=>students)from numerous stresses. To specify this, they enjoy these courses far from the matter which is related to enter university(=> not related to etrance exam), and avoid diseases from gigantic (=> many ) stresses. To illustrate this, almost all Korean high school students are suffering from the stress which came from the burden to go to good university. Far from concerning about the major courses, such as English, mathematics, and science, music and art courses are able to unwind their stress by singing songs, and drawing some pictures. I think that it might be one of the best ways to relax from the struggle to go the university.
│ Furthermore, taking these classes, they could find the abilities to become an artist, and a musician such as soprano, portraitist. Although most children are tending to develop their ability at the early age special fields, such as art and music, a few people might find their aptitude at the old age. To exemplify, my cousin found out his aptitude to play the piano when he was the third grade of high school. As a result, thanks to the music course in his school, he has become now one of the greatest piano players in Korea. Whether he or shoe has what it takes become an artists and musician could appear at the old age. Therefore, these courses are essential to take in secondary school.
│ Moreover, although students have not become artists and instrumentalists, what students learn from these courses could be their knowledge. In other words, these courses may play a major role improving their common sense in the fields of music and art.
│ To put two and two together(=> In conclusion), from my standpoint, it is natural that music and art courses should be requirements not optional due to their functions which are helping students relieve their stress, giving the chance to find out their aptitude, and some knowledge. I hope that every student enjoys their music and art classes in school days. I believe that they might recall music and art classes were really good after they graduate their schools.
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