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│ Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People behave differently when they wear different clothes. Do you agree that different cloths influence the way people behave? Use specific examples to support your answer.
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│ Some people think that kinds of cloths(=>clothing ) influences the way people behave and others thinks there is little relation between clothes and people's behavior. I truly believe that different(=> 생략) clothes have influence on the way people behave because clothes have their functional purposes and people are expected to behave properly(=>correspondingly) with different clothes.
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│ First, clothes have their functional purposes and meanings. We choose a proper cloth(=> clothes ) which is suitable to our activities and purposes. For example, we wear a sweat shirt when we do exercise, and put on a suit when we do some formal works. In addition, when we have a certain kind of clothes, we are inclined to behave according to the wear. We used to behave and move more freely and actively with sports wears. It means there is a relation(=> correlation) between our behaviors and clothes.
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│ Second, we are expected and sometimes forced to behave properly(=> correspondingly) with different clothes by other people. Because some clothes have some strong meanings and customs, we are required to behave aptly according to what we wear. For example, we generally think that women had better behave more carefully when they put on a short skirt and men should behave well when they wear a suit.
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│ To sum up, I firmly believe that different clothes influence the way people behave because clothes have their purposes and meanings and we know that we had better behave properly with our clothes. Even though there are many clothes which are suitable for many purposes and situations, I think we still have a kind of social consensus about clothes in many cases.
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