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│ It has been said, "Not everything that is learned is contained in books." Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why?
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│ People gain knowledge from their experience or from certain books. Some people think knowledge gained from experience is most (=> the most ) efficient while others insist reading a book is one of the most useful ways to gain knowledge. If given these two choices to me, I would choose the knowledge gained from books at several viewpoints(=> for several reasons).
│ Experience is as important as books in order to learn something. Knowledge gained from experience could not be forgotten easily. For example, a child never forget the fact that boiling water can be dangerous if the child hurt by boiling water. People also cannot experience directly how hot the temperature of the sun is. people can just know about it by reading books( 이 부분은 내용이 어색합니다). Obviously, experience is very important for our learning. However, sometimes, experience can be very dangerous, and knowledge gained from experience is limited.
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│ When people gain knowledge from books, they might not last for a long time in their heart(=> mind). Sometimes, people cannot understand what the book says, and they cannot feel realistic. In spite of these shortcomings, reading books is very essential for gaining knowledge. People can get a lot of information through certain book(=> books) in a short time, and realize about things people can never experience. When I was a university student, I could gain knowledge through experience, such as field trips, experiments. However, in most cases, I depended on many reference and textbooks to know what I wanted to know.
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│ To sum up, I think reading books is more efficient way to learn something than experience. I can know about what I can never experience in my real life. In addition, I get a lot of knowledge in a short time. That's why I think books are better than experience to gain (=> in gaining) knowledge.
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