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│ 182. (AD) Many people have a close relationship with their pets. These people treat their birds, cats, or other animals as members of their family. In your opinion, are such relationships good? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
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│ Many changes are found when comparing past with today(=> Comparing past with today reveals many changes). Whatever people may say, I have no doubt that one of biggest changes in 20th century is intimate relationship with their pets such as birds, cats and dogs. Since people's criteria for living in abundance differs, the controversy could be led in terms of pet which already upgraded as a member of family(=> 다른영어로 써보세요: Whether pets are members of the family is contoversial). As far as I am concerned, however, I find it awkward such relationship. There are some factors (that) make my view convincing.
│ In the first place, too much concern about their pet deprive person of time, effort and expense. As we all know, it is not strange anymore to see luxurious cafes, hair shops and cloths shops specialized for pets. You may once met the people who always carry their pet with them. Considering pets as a showing off, they are never hesitate to decorate their pets spending all his tims and money. I wouldn't surprised if they bought a pair of expensive cloths for pet rather than their own's. I suggest them to think ( suggest that they think ) about even a moment(=> 생략) the people who suffer from starvation in Africa.
│ Secondly, it can cause dysfunction of interpersonal relationship. Psychology journals have reported that people who spend too much time with their pet seem to have a problem in communicating people. Take a pet dog as a example(=> For example ), I often see people find pleasure and satisfaction when a pet dog obeying their order. To put in other way, they behave what the owner expect them to do to get food and praise. But, we face many difficulties relating to communication with people in the realities of life(=> 생략). Such person would easily upset (=> be upset) when the situation is beyond their control unlike their pet. This example indicates that raising pet takes chance to learn social skill(=> 내용어색 : pet에게서 사회생활을 배우는 데 불필요 할 이유가 없겠죠 ...)).
│ As I stated above, I am not welcome such close relationship with pets not only because of taking away time, effort and expense but also because of losing a chance to learn social skill. Even though, I can not persuade those who are fond of raising pet, I firmly believe that such relationship is harmful to human.
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