■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer.
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▶ Topic :
It is sometimes acceptable to infringe upon
people’s freedom.
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▶ Your Answer :
At first glance,
some people can think that it’s always wrong to interfere with others’ freedom.
However, in reality, I am highly convinced that regulating people’s freedom is
needed in some cases for two indubitable reasons.
To
begin with, government sometimes has to limit some people’s freedom for
physical safety of publics. In particular, government has duty to protect
citizens’ life especially in public places where many people use, such as
airports and big stations. I’ll take my personal experience as an example. When
I went to Incheon airport to travel to Jeju islands, airport staffs examine all
people’s body and bags to make sure whether there’s any knife or gun. It took a
half hour and partly interfere people’s privacy, but by doing so, I and other
passengers could enjoy travel safely. As this example shows, keeping public
safe from physical danger is more crucial than protecting individual’s freedom
in some cases.
On
top of that, regulating people from using fatal substances is desirable for the
whole society. To be specific, precluding citizens from drinking drugs or any
other detrimental chemicals can beneficial for a country’s economy and health.
This is due to the fact that people are less likely to be addicted to poisonous
chemicals; therefore they can live healthier and more diligent life. According
to the research of World Health Organization, countries which banned people
from buying and selling drugs such as Korea and Japan had lower rate of unemployment,
poverty, homelessness than countries which do not. This research validates that
prohibiting people from using and trading hazardous substances can actually
bring positive effect on their nation.
In conclusion, physical
health of public and whole society can gain benefits through regulating peoples’
freedom in some cases. In this regard, I firmly believe that it is sometimes
necessary to limit peoples’ freedom.
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AGREE
1. for physical safety – airport->search ppl body, open bags
e.g. go to jeju island- take 30m, wait in line, but keep safe .
detect weapons-knife,bomb, harmful substances –drugs to protect passengers
2. economy- regulation for monopoly -> protect consumer , keep good pric reasnabl
3. regulate travel- dangerous places with epidemic, wars
4. drugs, cocain for people’s health
e.g. statiscs health and insurance ) Kor -> less ppl who are drug addicted