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The majority of people in their early to mid-thirties think that readings assigned by teachers is are more important (비교 대상이 무엇인지?) for students than readings by their own personality. However I believe that reading by their own personality is more important for students. This is because it enables students to relax and boost moods, and to enjoy a better quality of life. First, reading by thier their own personality is effective for relaxation and can boost moods. Interestingly, it has been a topic on various social network sites such as facebook. Intiaially Initially, I thought that readings assigned by teachers is are more important. However, after reading relevant facebook articles, (주제와 연관성이 적어 집중도를 떨어뜨립니다.) I realized that students would not relax and boost moods if they don't do not read by thier their own personality. Every morning, students have to get thorugh through traffic jam to go to school. While they are at school, they also have to read through countless texts. Therefore, as a way to lower stress levels, students are must be able to read books by thier their own personality. Even if it is onlky only for a short time, thier their minds become relaxed, and they are no longer thinking about thier their studies and homeworks. This was enough to change my initial thought, and I learned that Reading by one’s own personality is more important (비교 대상이?) and because it is effective for relaxation and can boost moods. Second, reading by thier their own personality enables students to enjoy a better quality of life. Interestingly, a renowned social scientist in Korea (누구?) published an article which claims that students get the largest boost to thier their happiness when they are reading by thier their own personality. His study was interesting because it supported my view. The article claimed that Korean people believe reading by thier their own personality enables peopel people to get away from thier their daily routines. They experience new and different activities and diverse customs. They can also appreciate these moments by reading articles reflected reflecting thier their own personality. I thought of this report because the resluts results of the survey resonated with my thoughts. To sum up, I believe that reading by thier their own personality is more important (비교 대상이 무엇인지?): to relax and boost moods, and to enjoy a better quality of life. Writing 0-30 scale Fair (17-20) 오타가 많습니다. 사소해 보이는 실수라도 반복, 누적되면 감점 요인이 될 수 있습니다. 조금 더 꼼꼼하게 글을 작성하고, 완성한 뒤에는 반드시 다시 읽어보는 시간을 가지세요. 기초적인 단어의 철자를 반복해서 틀리는 글에 좋은 점수를 주기는 어렵습니다. TOEFL 글쓰기는 academic writing skill을 평가하는 시험입니다. 따라서 축약형 등 비격식체와 구어체를 피하고 정확한 영어를 사용해야 합니다. TOEFL 글쓰기는 글을 길게 쓴다고 유리한 시험이 아닙니다. 본문의 각 문단은 각각 하나의 topic sentence를 핵으로 하고, 문단의 각 문장은 그것을 논리적으로 지지하고 발전시켜야 합니다. |