▶ Your Answer :
Some people may think that grading is
not an feasible option to encourage
students to learn. However, I think that grading is a viable option to make
students study harder. This is because it can arouse competitive spirit among students, and can be a criterion for
rewards.
To begin with, grading
can make students feel the sense of competition. By comparing each
other with grades, students can get the sense of accomplishment or disappointments
disappointment that can lead them to study harder than
before. Students who get high grades would put more effort on their
study to keep their positions. Others who have lower grades would have struggle with studying not to feel disappointments disappointment
and be better against than other classmates. For example, according
to a research, which compared pass-fail courses with grading courses,
conducted by the University of California, students in grading courses
showed more active participation in lectures than ones in pass-fail
courses evidently. Students in grading courses responded that grading makes
them to study harder when they get sense
of achievement or disappointments from every test result. On the other hand,
ones in pass-fail courses responded that the courses do not make them study
hard or focus on lectures.
On top of that, grading can be a
measure for rewards. In the beginning of young's
school lives (어떤 의미인지 파악 불가)
or elementary schools, most of students
merely study without specific purposes a purpose. Surely, some of them have their own
dreams, but they can constantly change, and even some students have
not thought of dreams neither. In these conditions, grading can be a criterion
for rewards which inspire them learn enthusiastically. Parents can give their
children toys, dolls, or clothes they want to have if they get certain
grades in tests. This makes students study hard
and be active in lectures class. Or Sometimes even without rewards from others,
students can feel sense of accomplishment from their high grades and keep
study hard themselves. (앞선 문단의 반복?)
For example, I who once did not have any interests on study put much effort on
my first mock test in high school. I sincerely prepared and finished the test,
since my mom promised to me that she would buy me
a cellphone if I get the first position in my class. So, I studied hard and got
the first one. As time went by, even without presents or rewards to my parents,
I could keep study hard for sense of accomplishment from good grades.
(이 문단의 point가 무엇인지가
불분명합니다. 결국 좋은 성적은 성취감을 준다는 것이 핵심 근거인데, 앞 문단과의 차이가 무엇인지?)
To sum up, grading let students
to feel competitive spirit and can be
a criterion for rewards which would make them study hard. For these
reasons, I agree with the statement that grading encourages students to
learn.
Writing
0-30 scale
Fair (23-25)
제시한 두 point가 표면상으로는 달라보이지만,
각 point를 뒷받침하는 핵심 근거가 ‘좋은
점수를 받으면 성취감을 얻는다’라는 점에서 크게 구분되지 않습니다. 글의 논리적인 완성도가 아쉬워집니다.
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