▶ Your Answer :
Printed
books and television have had greatly a great effect on the
Korean society. Some people says that
printed books have had more effect on the
society than television has had, but others disagree. I disagree with the
statement because of two reasons.
First,
television has had more effect on Korean education. Korean had gone through
economical crisis for 10 years, and the national government couldn't
could not invest to the
education system. It had caused significantly different educational environments among Korean cities, and
especially in rural areas'
areas, the education system was so bad. The
government decided to reduce the differences of
education system, so they made EBS that is an
television channel for education. After the start of EBS, the differences of
education system among cities largely have reduced, and the majority of Korean
students has been educated with same levels of education. A recent survey
conducted the Korean government shows that the each of the average math and
science grades which have got by high school students among Korean cities
successively have decreased since the start of EBS. It also shows that before
the EBS, there were where a lot of books for study were, it could not have coudn't
had an effect on the reduce of the
educational differences among cities.
Second,
television also has had more effect on Korean music industry that is one of the
most important industry in Korea. Since books are limited media which only can
show letters and pictures, television is more influential
to the music industry. Because the music
industry has a big part of Korean economy, it can be also true that television
has had more effect on Korean economy than printed books have done. A recent survey conducted by the Korean
government shows that the apex of the Korean music industry was reached when
the number of Korean music shows reached the highest number in Korean history.
However, the survey also shows that the Korean music industry experienced
stagnation when the government regulated tightly the Korean music shows.
Writing 0-30
scale
Fair(18-20)
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