▶ Your Answer :
The lecturer
talks about disadvantages of supporting football game in school. He says that
the theory stated in the reading passage is very
different and somewhat inaccurate when compared to what the lecture explains
for the following sets of points.
First,
supporting money for quality team is not beneficial. The lecturer also indicates that the attendance actually
declined due to high price. However, the passage This directly contradicts the reading passage that
says that school facilities can be improved by funding for
football which then increases
attendance. The lecture directly contradicts what
the passage indicates.
Second, funding
for football game does not help a potential growth growing
potential in revenue. The reading passage argues that one high school could
improve extracurricular activities from investment
for by investing on football teams.
However, the lecturer says that teachers in Texas school
lost both health benefits and funding for textbooks.
This lecture is another part where experience
contradicts the passage. (표현이 아주
어색합니다.)
Third, the school should give equal benefits for all students
regardless of their statuses. The reading passage says that developing promoting football games
by funding can make students try out for the game and produce winning teams.
However, the lecturer talks about only staffs and students in the football game can earn advantages by enhanced
football game facilities. The passage might become one-sided. (본인의 주관적 판단을 개입하지 마세요. The lecture
suggests that the reading passage might be one-sided. 등 각 지문의 내용을
정리해야 합니다.)
Writing
0-30 scale
Fair(20-23)
두
지문의 내용은 잘 파악하여 정리했습니다. 단, 두 지문을
요약하고 정리하는 것 이외에 본인의 주관을 개입하는 일은 없어야 합니다.
문법과
표현 면에서 어색한 부분이 많습니다. 본문의 첨삭을 확인하고 공부하세요.
|