▶ Your Answer :Some people think that making decisions quickly is always wrong.
However, I think that it sometimes has significant advantages, which are more
helpful than enough deliberation. This can be best illustrated through the
great discovery in scientific filed field, as well as my experience.
First of all, not all making decision quickly
quick decision makings are is flawed in terms of
intuition. Intuition is the ability to think rapidly and make decisions directly. It is helpful
much more helpful when people cannot make decisions even after enough consideration.
Especially in the fields of science, intuition plays a considerable role. For
example, many scientists had a hard time solving the paradox concerning
relationship between light and space-time. Although many scientists collected
their rational thoughts, they cannot solve the problems. However, Albert
Einstein, the famous physicist obtained the solutions very easily, using his
intuition. In addition, his theory was demonstrated by various experiments. These
mean This means that his intuition was more effective than other scientists'
deliberation. (따라서 짧은 시간안에 내려진 결정이라
해도, 직관적으로 결정한 경우 더 옳은 선택일 수 있다-라고
주장과 연결시켜 마무리해주세요)
Secondly, considering the importance of efficiency, I
do not think that quick decision-making is always wrong. In some fields accuracy
requiring careful thought is the most important value, while in other fields, efficiency
is the most important value. In this regard, making decisions quickly enables
people to deal with their tasks efficiently. For instance, when I was going to
a university to take a class, I used a taxi because at that time I was likely
to be late. However, all the ways were crowded. After the taxi driver
had intuitional thought, he drove his car into a narrow way. I ended up being
in class on time because of his judgment based on intuition. If he thought
enough time and drove his car, I might be late in class. <- intuition에 대한 내용이어서 위의 문단과 잘 구분되지 않습니다. 빠른 decision making이 틀리지 않고 “옳은” 경우를 제시해주세요
In conclusion, although careful thinking is important in some
areas, I do not believe that making decision quickly is always wrong.
The various scientific results came from scientists' intuition, as well as contemporary
people are living in this world with intuition. The great physicist
Einstein said, "Intuition is more important than knowledge."
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Fair (18-21)
첫 번째 근거는 매우 설득력있고, “직관”과 이를 뒷받침하는 사례 모두 적절합니다. 다만 두 번째 근거 역시
직관에서 벗어나지 않는데, 사실 주제는 “빨리 내린 결정”이지, “직관”이 아닙니다. 두 가지를 연결시켜 설명하는 것은 첫 번째 근거로 충분했기 때문에, 두
번째 근거는 이와 구분되는 다른 내용을 제시해주는 편이 더 좋겠습니다. 수고 많으셨습니다^^ |