Some people argue that writing is essntial essential than speaking. However, in my opinion,
speaking is more necessary than writing. The reasons are the following as followed: first, speaking, which is greatly linked
to social interaction is important in our society. Second, it is an easier
method of communication.
First of all, more and more businesses require
people who are not only specialists in their fields but also good at social
interaction. In the rapidly changing environment of science and economy, no
task can be done by a single person. Given the need for collaboration, being
able to present their opinions clearly, is an important qualifications for
success. For example, a suvey was conducted to get opinions of from the interviewers of companies. People responded
that they require job applicants that who
are brilliant speakers that can not only being
cooperative with other workers but also good at interacting with costomers
customers. Thus, speaking is very important.
Next, speaking allows easier communication. When
society was underdeveloped, people had to send letters in order to contact
someone living far away. However, nowadays, the development of technology,
especially the cell phone, allows people to talk directly to each other.
Clearly, this shortens the time it takes to communicate when speaking.
In conclusion, speaking is a better way of communicating
communication than writing. This is because it
allows easier communication and more businesses require people who are better
at social interaction. In this regard, I believe speaking is better than
writing in all ways.
Grade: Limited (17-18)
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