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Some people argue that advertisements are less useful due to faulty information that they provide. However, in my opinion, advertisements are useful in various ways as the following. First, it allows people to be informed about goods and services. Next, it broadens our perspective. FIrst First of all, people benefit tremendously by easily and quickly gaining information about various products. This is because of the development of technology which allowed advertisements to be created in various forms such as posters and online advertisements. When society was underdeveloped people had spend spent time and energy to find appropriate information and knowledge on products that they consume. However, with the help of technology which allowed advertisements to be created in various forms, people can access to advertisements very easily than ever. For example, as I am a college student, I am very busy searching for products that are cost-worthy cost-saving. Therefore, I go online to look for advertisements on products that can be bought with a desirable price. Recently, I bought a new tablet PC from a banner advertisement with a really very (구어체적 표현) cheap price. This shows that with the advance of technology which created various forms of advertisements, people can easily find information about products that they are willing to purchase.
Next, Concerns may exist there are concerns on the dishonesty of information provided by the advertisements. However, advertisements is useful to briaden broaden our perspective, which can be hardly acquired by other activities. In the identical environment that we are exposed to, people generally have similar views and experiences. However, by simply looking at various advertisements, people can obtain refreshing ideas by watching creative advertisements that reflect our society. At this moment I would like to talk about an advertisement that I recently watched. The advertisement was from a Flight flight company. It was a clip that introduced French culture by showing food, cloathings and customs. Although it was a short video, I was inspired about French culture that seemed very exotic for me. Thus, now I am planning to visit France this summer. Likewise, advertisements broadens our perspective about the world even better than by any other activities. In conclusion, advertisements have positive influence on people due to the reasons stated above. (결론이 좀 부실해보일 수 있습니다. 앞서 든 근거를 한 줄 정도씩 요약해주는 것도 좋겠습니다.) IN In this regard, they are essential in people's life. Writing 0-30 scale Good(27-30) 자신의 주장을 지지하는 point를 적절히 선택하고 설명했습니다. 문법 면에서 흠 잡을 데가 크게 없는 글입니다. 그 외에는 아래 올린 통합형 글쓰기와 같은 점을 지적합니다. 오타가 많이 보입니다. 사소해 보이는 실수라도 반복, 누적되면 감점 요인이 될 수 있습니다. 조금 더 꼼꼼하게 글을 작성하고, 완성한 뒤에는 반드시 다시 읽어보는 시간을 가지세요. 또, TOEFL Writing은 academic writing skill을 측정하는 시험입니다. 따라서 구어체와 비격식적인 표현을 피하고 정확한 영어를 사용해야 합니다. |