▶ Your Answer : Some people think that offering students their scores is beneficial to promote learning. However, (앞 문장과 대립하는 의견이 아니므로 However는 부적절.) In my opinion, there are several advantages of providing grades to students to stimulate learning. Due to presented grades Because grades are presented, students can know their condition level in while learning. Also, scores can be the motivation of studying to study for students. To begin with, it is possible that students are able to recognize their extent of comprehension with subjects and put their effort on studying when feedbacks are given. That is, thanks to grades, students can know what they are missing and what is needed to improve their abilities thanks to grades. For example, I am a postgraduate students now. Last semester, I took a course about on design history and that was the one of the subjects that I really wanted to learn. To study harder and get an A+, I asked a professor to provide some feedbacks about my report. And She gave me some comments and the grade of it, so I could know about my state status and level. It also made me study harder and I was able to obtain A+ eventually. On top of that, grades can be a motivation to learning learn for students. Without any presented grades, students are more likely to less concentrate on their study and their level cannot be increased. A study was conducted by Seoul National University to determine whether notifying grades to students could affect their tendency to studying study more. The researchers compared two groups with each other. The first group consisted of students who were given grades and the other one was formed with students who were not noticed of any scores. What they found was interesting. The former tended to have more effort to learn because some were alarmed that their grade was low and others was encouraged by a good grade. The results shows that feedbacks can inspire students to study hard. To sum up, students can make complement on their learning by knowing their states status and can be stimulated by positive or negative results. In this regard, I feel that providing marks with students is good to promotes learning. Writing 0-30 scale Fair(23-25) 자신의 주장을 지지하는 point를 적절히 선택하고 설명했습니다. 논리적으로는 큰 문제가 없는 글이지만, 문법 면에서 아쉬운 부분이 많습니다. 영어는 명사의 수에 굉장히 민감한 언어입니다. 주어와 동사의 단복수가 일치하는지를 꼼꼼하게 살펴보세요. 관사(a/an, the)를 어떤 경우에 어떤 것을 붙이고 어떤 경우에 붙이지 않는지를 확인해보세요. 그 외에 to 부정사를 비롯한 일부 문법의 활용이 어색한 편입니다. 본문의 첨삭을 참고하세요. |