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Purposes of education are to convey understand knowledge, as well as to cultivate inner values including integrity, tolerance, and cooperation. Some people think that studying alone is better in terms of concentration. However, I prefer to study with other students. It is not only because studying in a group is efficient, but also because it cultivates students' inner values.
First of all, considering efficiency of studying, I would like to study together. I think that efficiency is important when we study, because high efficiency in study means that we can acquire much information in a short time. In this regard, group study allows us to save time to study, as well as to learn about knowledge much more. To be specific, when studying with other students, students they can get much more information by dividing fields of study, 분야를 나눈다는 표현은 좀 어색한 것 같아요. and share them with other students. 주체를 표현하는 단어(I, We, Students)를 한 가지로 통일해주는 것이 좋습니다. 나, 우리로 칭했다가 갑자기 '학생들'로 객관화하ㅊ 것은 흐름을 어색해보이게 합니다. For example, in my case, when I studied GRE, I spent much time with my friends. We divided the fields of study that which each was did a good at, and shared information each other. I took a mathematics section, and my friends studied writing section. After that, we taught each other the other friends about one's own area. Consequently, we got the high score of GRE together in all sections. These can best illustrate the importance of group study in terms of efficiency.
In addition, I prefer to study with a group because of cooperation. Cooperation has a significant role in society where there are many kinds of communication with many people each other such as colleagues, junior and senior. In this regard, group study can cultivate students' cooperation. By studying together, teaching each other, and considering in other students' position, the students can develop their cooperative mind. In educational area, group study has been used in order to develop developing cooperation. Many universities in Korea, such as Seoul University, Korea University, and KAIST, requires the students to take a class containing group study. The standard for assessment includes achievement, variety, and cooperation. It means that university where many educational experts are together uses group study to cultivate cooperation.
In conclusion, I want to study in a group because of its advantages. When I study with my friends, I can acquire much information effectively, as well as develop out cooperation
Writing 0–30 score scale Fair - Good (23-26)
효율성과 협력의 측면에서 그룹스터디의 이점을 잘 풀어낸 글입니다. 설명 과정에서 불필요하게 자세한 부분이나 내용이 겹치는 부분은 다듬어서 간결한 논리 흐름을 보여줄 수 있게끔 하시면 좋을 것 같아요. 전반적으로 구성은 좋으니 어색한 표현이나 간결한 구성에 신경쓰시면 충분히 고득점의 글이 될 수 있을 것으로 보입니다. 수고 많으셨습니다. ^^ |