▶ Your Answer :
Some people think that it is not important for them to be
able to read and write because their communication methods have continually progressed are progressing as diverse media.
However, in my opinion, a capability of literacy is one of the
essential factors to sustain the stable level of living for the following
reasons: to give people more job opportunities and to socialize with other. First of all, these
days being able to read and write allows
people to get a job more easily than ever before.
This is because unlike the past when that most
economies were based on agriculture and manufacturing which was
labor-oriented, now we are in the information age. Thus, there is a much
higher priority placed on literacy. According to a study conducted by the
National Association of Adult Literacy, those who can read and write are
enormous competitive advantages over those who cannot because developing and
advanced countries are moving toward economies based on manipulation of
information in the workplace. This study pointed out that the number of
employment opportunities available to non-literate people continue to decline
precipitously as a result of this trend. On top of that, literacy plays a
significant role in keeping in contact with others. This is due to the fact
that compared to the past when people depended mostly on mobile phone to communicate;
today's people rely more and more on text-message or e-mail. (Unclear comparison) Thus, they communicate through electronic forms of
written communication. For instance, my friend and I are keeping in touch with text-message or e-mail to communicate with others. We send to
text-message to each other numerous times every day. I simply cannot imagine that
how I could socialize this
works without being able
to read and write. I don'
think that it is too extreme to say that illiterate people easily lead to
isolation in today's electronic world. (What does it mean?) All things considered, what people write and read literacy skill is really effective tools to communicate with others as
well as to get a job. In this regard, I believe that literacy make it possible
for society to be properly operated.
채점기준표
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Grammar
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Contents
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Example
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Coherence
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점수
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3
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3
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2
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2
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Score
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Fair 17-20
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인트로에서는 과거와 비교할 때 현시대의 literacy가 더 중요한가를 놓고 보았을 때, 어떠한 방향으로 arguing 하고 있는지를 정확히 보여주셔야 합니다. 첫번째 바디에서는 getting
information이 job
opportunity와 연관성을 describe more deeply and specifically
하셔야 합니다. 두번째 내용에서의 과거의 mobile phone사용 의존도와 현재 email, test msg의 사용의 comparison이 현재에도 역시 mobile phone의존이 높은 이유로 비교 불가합니다.
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