Many
people think that improving schools are not the most effective way for
countries’ development. However, In
(in) my opinion, Developing schools are most significant way to progress its
country. This is due to improving schools can make people who are capable of
significant contributions to society and it brings more economic development.
To
begin with, Improving schools make them to play a (an) important role in
society. Schools teach a role how to contribute (to) a society to people
and it more (is) likely to continue to grow people with social
contributions. Let me take my experience for example. When I was in middle
school, I lived in a rural area which did not have good educational systems. Even
many schools had inadequate teachers and poor facilities. At that time, the
government decided to support investments about (invest in) educational
systems which contain schools. My schools (school) also
was (also) supplied (improved with) good quality teachers and
facilities such as a library. As time goes by, Many (many) students who
received high-quality education (from my school) became lawyers, teachers
and they contributed (to) local area.
On
the top of that, Improving (improving) schools bring the economic
efficiency to its own countries. In the modern world, Information is very
high value (highly valued). Therefore, dealing with information gives
economic effects and schools permit people to gather and deal with
information. A study was conducted by the Korea University with counties as
respondents. the (The) purpose of survey was (to know whether) schools
could affect countries’ economics. The result was
intriguing. Developed countries already had many good educational systems and
schools and they said economic development have connection with education
systems.
To
sum up, Development schools (developing school) is the most significant
way to progress countries. This is because it results in making
(educating) people who can contribute their county and brings (bringing)
more economic efficiency.
Grade : Fair (18-23)
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