▶ Your Answer :
Some
people think that learning to read and write has lost importance as time
passed. However, in my opinion, I think that learning to read and write has
become much more important than ever. This is because most of the information
provided today is stored as writing, and helps people to save or transfer
information easily. To begin with, most of the
information that we access is written. To be able to understand and use
this information, one must be able to read. If people are unable, they will not
have enough understanding about the state of the world around them, and make it
difficult for them to get jobs. <= 많은 information
들이 internet 을 통해 공급이 되는데, 읽고
이해하는 것이 중요하다 등등. For example, I have met a person, who
did not know how to read. He was a very smart person, but because he could not
read, many companies rejected his offer to work for the company. The person
could only do jobs as cleaning the streets, and emptying trash cans. But after
he started learning how to read and write, the person obtained more knowledge,
and finally was able to get a job in a well payed company. On top of that, people use writing as
a method of saving and moving information. In the past, people had to talk to
people directly in order to hear what the other person wanted to say. But after
people started to read and write, they were able to leave messages, and the
receiver could read the messages any time he/she wanted. For instance, many of
the stories we here today have come from ancient people who told the story to
their children, and these children to their children, and so on. By this way,
modification could happen in the original story. However, some stories were
engraved in stone, or carved in to clay tablets. These were left to be read by
many people, and because we can read, we are able to read the story and lessons
left by people from the past. <- 문제에서는 it
has ever been 를 물어 보고 있습니다. 현대에서 이것이 왜 saving and moving information 이 더 중요한지 얘기 해주세요. To
sum up, most of the information that we access is written, and people write
messages to save or give information to someone. Because of this, I think it
has become more important to be able to know how to read and write Writing 0-30 Score
Scale Fair (17-23)
Overall Comment: Body 1 에서는 왜 현대 에 reading/writing 이 중요한지 설명 해주세요. Body 2 에서도 왜 현재 saving/moving info 가
더 중요한지 이야기 해주세요. 문제에서 ~~ 어느때보다 중요해
졌다 라 핵심이기 때문에 거기에 맞게 글을 써주세요. |