■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words.
■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer

Q. Parents must have strict rules if they want their children success on life.

    Some people think that parents must have strict rules if they want their children success on life because people feel the most important main factor of success is coming from parents’ strict rule. However, in my opinion, for children’s success, sports as important as strict rules for two reasons: to receive good health and a sense of responsibility.

    To begin with, physical activities allow children to success. This is because a good physical is one of the main factors of success. Thus, they can reduce their stress with participate in athletic activities to maintain their health. In other words, if they should continue studying under the parents’ restrict rules, they are easily stressed out. Moreover, stress is one of the main factors of diseases through weakening immune system. According to a study conducted by Seoul National University of Korea in 2007, a test on mice showed that life span was shortened when they regularly underwent electronic shocks. Interestingly, the researchers found a link between this and human being who suffered periodic stress. This implies that high stress levels coming from lack of exercise had a negatively affect people, resulting in lower life span.

    On top of that, sport activities play a significant role in improving children’s a sense of responsibility that leads to their success. This is because, sport games require responsibilities, such as arriving on time, meeting times, observing regulations, managing schedules wisely, and completing their assignments. According to a study conducted by National Youth Leader Council, students who engaging in sport team do better academically than their peers who do not participate in sport team. This is because they know how to handle their multiple tasks and studies, and they managed their time very well. On the whole, students who juggle physical activities and school are more mature and equipped to more success. This is not stretched far as education.

    To sum up, athletic activities are good for children’s success on life to promote health as well enhance opportunity for social skills, which are the most important factors of life successes. In this regard, I believe that parents must not have strict rules if they want their children success on life in order to ensure children’s future success.