▶ Your Answer : The recent topic of heated debate is whether students are more interested in politics than they were in the past.
Although some people believe that students are less interested in politics than they were in the past is more meaningful. I strongly contend that students are more interested in politics than they were in the past for the following reasons. 여기까지 서론 내용 한 문단으로 합쳐주세요.
Most importantly, by students are more interested in politics, people can enhance inhance their insights while growing up, and they are immersed by certain types of information and knowledge kwoeldge about this world through formalized education.
The problem with this is that most of the information and knowledge is conveyed with the sources' sources viewpoint and they can easily become shortsighted their horizon. horzion. Therefore in order to gain deeper views and become more cultured, they should be encouraged to believe in my opinion.
Most importantly, students are more interested in politics than they were in the past enable enables people to uncover aptitudes they never knew they had. Modern people are forced to lead highly scheduled lives as the world becomes more contentious and fast-paced than ever. Consequently, they are likely to miss chances to develop into the issues from which they can tremendously benefit. This explains why it is better for to students are to be more interested in politics than in the past in honing potential honingpotential that could have been overlooked. off-topic. 논제가 묻는 내용과 아무런 관련이 없는 답변입니다.
To sum up I believe my explanations above sufficiently prove proce that advantages of my opinion. Hence, in order for people to acquire these benefits, my belief should be undoubtedly accepted as is a better decision.
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문법오류가 너무 많습니다. 기본적인 절, 구, 품사의 개념을 다시 점검하시면 좋을 것 같아요. 문법오류가 많으면 내용 전달력이 떨어지기 때문에 대부분의 채점항목에서 감점요인이 될 수밖에 없습니다. 내용 역시 논점에 맞지 않는 부분이 너무 많습니다. '과거보다 오늘날 학생들이 정치에 관심이 많다고 생각하는가'이므로 정치에 관심을 가지면 좋은 점을 설명하는 것은 논점에 어긋납니다. 모델에세이에서 무조건 키워드만 바꾼다고 해서 답안이 될 수 있는 것이 아닙니다. 흐름에 맞게 내용을 활용하고 재구성하는 연습을 집중적으로 해주시는 게 좋을 것 같아요. 현재 문제가 쉬운 문제는 아니니 비교적 더 쉬운 주제부터 차근차근 변형과 적용 연습을 하시면 훨씬 도움이 될 거예요~ 문법에 맞는 작문도 꼭 꼼꼼하게 연습해주세요! 수고 많으셨습니다. ^^
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