▶ Your Answer :
In this information
and globalized information era, the society requires various abilities in many points who people
cultivate are various. Some people think that reading and wiring
skills are not necessary for contemporary people in terms of development of
computer technology. However, I think that they are considered more essential
today, considering the following two reasons; we should acquire information as
much as possible, and we should be able to protect our assets.
First of all, literacy is a significant ability
today because it is a good method to get knowledge. Comparing with the past, diverse knowledge (Such as?) has been emerged.
Especially, in this information society, ability to get gain knowledge is
necessary because if not, one cannot do anything without proper information for
living.
Therefore reading ability is essential in order to learn about something. For
example, in Korea 100 years ago, people were able to make a living. although
Because
most of the works such as farming and manufacturing were done by physical labor,
whether or not they were illiterate doesn’t matter because they earned money from tasks not to
require reading skills such as farming. However, now, people should have
ability to read because every working places requires workers to be literate. (Show clear examples, just simple “importance” is repeatedly
emphasized)
In addition, not only reading ability but also
writing skill is important because it helps protects people's assets. Information was
not valuable in the past, but today it is very important asset to be protected.
Therefore people should be capable of protecting their own information,
whose method is with writing skill today. For example, when I studied at my graduate
school, I discovered novel
technologies to make a light (What is your invention?) It was
first time to be discovered, and I wanted to protect my technologies by
registering a patent. In order to giving get the international patent,
I wrote patent papers in English. If I had no ability to of writing in
English, I was not able to register my patent. My experience can best illustrate the importance of
ability to write.
In conclusion, I think that other skills are
likely to be seems important, but without reading and writing skills people cannot do anything are essential in this era.
That's because they enable us to acquire much information as well as to protect
their asset.
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Grammar
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Example
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Coherence
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점수
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2
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3
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2
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2
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Score
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Limited 17-19
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Diverse knowledge가 어디서 도래되었는지를 설명하여주세요. 또한 gaining
information 이 현시대의 삶에 있어 왜 중요한지 또한 as a tool로서 어떻게 literacy가 information을 얻는데 도움이 되는지를 명확히 보여주셔야 합니다. 또한 important 만 지속적으로 강조되고 있는데 어떤 측면에서 중요한지를 각각의 바디마다 다르게 서술하셔야 합니다.
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