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Whether it is beneficial that learning foreign countries is better
to visit by visiting those countries is a prevalent topic of serious debate. Two different opinions
exist. After pondering the opinions, personally, I agree with the idea that
visiting counties is better than just watching newspapers and magazines about
foreign countries.
Some may oppose to the opinions, but first it ensures that if people
experiences experience directly, the experiences can be more vivid about foreign culture.
While many consider that learn about foreign countries from newspapers and
magazines, we cannot deny the fact that it is better to experience the foreign
countries' cultures and eat their foods. For example, when I saw the magazines
about introducing India, . I thought that India Indian food might not good for me. Also,
I felt that India is so exotic to me. However, after I went to India, my
thinking was totally changed. India Indian food was so good for me and India’s
cultures are similar to my country’s culture. If I had not experienced did not experience directly India,
I would still have had still bad thought in India.
On top of that, to strengthen my viewpoints, magazines and newspapers
have an author’s opinions. It may not be favored by the majority of our society,
but I believe that watching magazines and newspaper makes people to get biases.
For instance, I saw the magazine about introducing the China. It described that
China is are so crowded that people could not move so easily. However, when I visited go
to the China, it was not crowded crowd compared to my country. It is obviously that an author’s
opinions are not similar with my thinking.
To conclude, I strongly argue that my standpoints of the two reasons are
sufficiently convincing. The first is that directly experiencing other cultures can allow people to know their
culture in detail and an author’s opinions could not match people’s thinking. In
this regard, I believe that people have to experience to visit other countries.
Writing 0–30 score scale Limited (1-16)
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