▶ Your Answer :
In this set of issues, both the reading
passage and the speaker discuss several aspects of whether the Industrial
Revolution led leads to good results or not. The lecturer argues that the
Industrial Revolution has brought negative impacts on people. This casts doubt
on the reading passage’s claim that people could develop quality of their life
by improving the Industrial Revolution.
To begin with, in the response to the reading, the speaker discusses
that even though the Industrial Revolution gave rise to a lot of new jobs, the job
conditions were not good. The reason is that numerous women and children had have
to work long time. However, they were paid little money. This contradicts the
reading passage’s claim that the Industrial Revolution created many jobs.
On top of that, the speaker challenges the reading by stating that
mining did not contributed to improving improve people’s health. healthy. This is because, the lecturer argues that
mining brought gave to people horrible dangerous conditions. Also, mining released
pollution things. It is obviously bad impacts to workers' respiratory system. people. This
refutes the reading passage’s claim that mining could develop developed people’s life.
Finally, the speaker refutes the reading by saying that improving agriculture
was not good to family farmers. Specifically, explaining that family farmers
could not compete with large producers. In addition, their urban life was full
of laborious job. This opposes the reading passage’s assertion that
agricultures helped people work more easily. that people’s made more easily to work.
Writing 0–30 score scale Fair (17-19)
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