▶ Your Answer :
Some people think
that companies should not be allowed to advertise their products directly in
television programs. However, in my opinion, it is okay for me to let companies
advertise their products in television programs. First, if companies
advertise their products directly in television shows, it will have a less negative effect than television
commercials that come on after the program is over. Usually, in the middle
of a program, there are always commercials coming on, and try to make the
viewers buy the product they are advertising. People do not like these
commercials a lot. <- negative effect 에 대한 설명을 더 해주세요. Do not like commercial 보다는
구체적으로 어떤 부정적인 효과 있을까요? For example, when I watch a television show, and see a
commercial right in the middle of the show, I get frustrated, because the
commercial is prohibiting -> disturbing/disrupting me from seeing the television show. On the other hand,
products that are directly advertised in television programs do not bother the
viewers. The commercials go on inside the television show, so it is less
frustrating for me to watch the show. Second, the directly advertised products in the
television program sometimes make viewers feel like an event in real life could happen in the program could actually happen. To
give a specific example, there is a drama. This drama contains many directly
advertised products, such as smartphones, cars, and medicine. This makes viewer
watching the drama feel a connection between the characters in the program and
themselves. They may also think ‘I had an experience like the one the characters are facing right now’, and actually become one with the character. <-. 이것이 왜 좋나요? Connection 을 할 때 소비자에게 좋은 점은 무엇인가요? To sum up, directly
advertised products can reduce the stress given from commercials shown in the
middle of the program, as well as make the viewers feel like one of the
characters in the television program. For these reasons, I agree that companies
should be allowed to advertise their products directly in television programs. Writing 0-30 Score
Scale Fair (17-23)
Overall Comment: 설명이 전체적으로 부족해요. Body 1 에서는 TV 보는
중간에 짜증난다 라는 이유로는 불충분해요. Negative effect 에 대해 조금 더 생각 해보세요. Body 2 에서는 connection 이 왜 중요한지 이야기 해주세요. |