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Opinions differ
whether grades encourage students to learn. I agree with the idea because
grades make students to realize their capacity or understanding of the subject
on test and have motivation to learn something.
First of
all, students can realize their capacity of understanding of the
subject on test when they are evaluated. This is helpful for students
to know what they need to study more. Also the grades which
students got demonstrate which field they are good at. Also
students decide what they major on in future
and make their effort with more efficiency. Let's take a look at the
opposite side claims. They argue that grades do not encourage students to learn.
They cite a few things as the reasons for their supporting. Some of their ideas
appear to have a point. Still, their argument is barely convincing and mostly
groundless. The fact of the matter is that there are numerous
examples which cast doubts on their claims. (본론에서는 반대 의견을 반론하지 말고 이유를 구체적으로
설명하거나 주제와 연결하세요.) Among them, my personal
experience why grades encourage students to learn. When I was fifteen in
middles school (school), on the first midterm
examination I got C on the math exam. Although before the exam I
thought that I made (a lot of) effort alot
and understood exactley on math, I realized
that I did not understand exactly on third subject
of math and I should have solved more examples on text book.
Therefore I compensated my short flaw with more effort and finally got A in
semester test. If I did not got my grade in midterm exam,
I would have not known what my weakness or how I study on mathematics.
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Overall Comment: 토플 에세이 맞게 구성하지 않았습니다. 반대 의견을 언급하지 마세요. 본론에서는 주장을 제시하고 주장에 대한 설명(논증) 2-3문장, 구체적인 예증 자료(언론보도자료, 연구결과, 나의 경험담 등을 주장과 연결지어서 제시) 3-5문장 정도로 분량을 정해두고 내용을 연결하세요. 2번째 본론이 없습니다. Why does grades help students to motivate? 그리고 결론이 없습니다. 결론 (요약-맺음말) 구성하세요. 스펠링 오류가 많습니다. 글
쓴 후 꼭 검토해주시길 바랍니다.