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Some people may think that knowledge
gained from books is more significant than the ones you gained from your
experience. Also, they might say that the books take a vital place for gaining
knowledge. However, in my opinion, I truly believe that a (knowledge from a) personal experience overwhelms
knowledge from a book. (이유들을 간단히 소개하세요 This is because…)
To begin with, knowledges you have
gained from your personal experience is unforgettable compared to books. Your
brain is the only structure to use when reading a book. But when it comes to a
personal experience, your whole body senses it. This means that your body,
including your brain, remembers the knowledge and it helps you not to make a
same mistake that you have made in the past. For example, I have read about 100
books while serving in Republic of Korean Army. Frankly speaking, I don't
recall a single (bit of
) information from 100 books as
of now. It feels like I have wasted my time on reading books.
On top of that, It's (it is ) really hard to apply the knowledge
you got from books to real life. Unless you memorize every single word from it,
it's very difficult for you to use it when you are in need. But a personal
experience is different. (how is it different? 설명하세요) For instance, I went on a trip to
Thailand about 3 years ago with a friend of mine. It was well-going until I
found out I lost my passport in airport. Thus, I had to rearrange my plane
ticket and it was such a mind blowing experience. However, this experience
helped me on a recent trip to Turkey in 2015. Because I had an experience about
losing a passport, I was able to pull myself up and carry my passport in a
secured pocket.
In conclusion, even though books are
still a great way to obtain knowledges, I would say personal experience does it
better. In this regard, I believe that knowledges gained from experience is
more important than knowledges from books for the reasons I mentioned above.
(글쓴이의 입장을 다시 표현하기 전 이유들을 요약하세요)
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Overall Comment: 예시를 다양하게 선택하세요. 자기 경험 보다 연구 결과 역사적 인물 등 의견을 뒷받침 하는 예시를 다양하게 선택하고 설명하세요. 서론에서는 글쓴이의 입장을 표현 한 후 이유들을 소개하세요. 본론의 2번째 문단에서 어떻게 다른지 구체적인 설명이 필요합니다. 그리고
결론에서는 글쓴이의 입장을
다시 표현하기 전 이유들을 요약하세요. 전체적으로 글 톤이
informal 한 경향이 있습니다. 문장이 기본적인 베이스가 대화체 입니다.