▶ Your Answer :
Whether the
younger have to plan and organize or not
<- 이것과 ability to
plan 과 다릅니다. is controversial issues. Two different
opinions exist in regard to this idea. After pondering the ideas from several
aspects, I personally agree that it is important for teenagers to plan and
organize their future life for two essential reasons.
To begin with, planning to their future helps them get only
necessary things. Many consider
that young people do not need to plan their life, but we cannot deny the fact
that a life plan can reduce a lot of waste of time. <- how? why? For
example, when I was fifteen years old, I tried to plan my life. At that time, I
decided to be a chemist. For my life plan, I studied chemistry and math harder
than other subjects. As a consequence, I saved a lot of time that need to study
other subjects and got good grades in chemistry and math.
On top of that, a life plan can help to arrange details about
their goals. It may not be favored by
the majority of our society, but I believe that a detailed plan is a major
ability to succeed in life. <- 이것이 왜 중요한가요?? Last Friday, a well-known professor of Seoul
National University in department of the social science published an editorial
in his research. Also, his study supported my viewpoint. In his research, 68
percent of participants who are the head of a large company planned their life
in details when they were young. In addition, it is the most beneficial way to
prove how to success in life.
To conclude, I strongly
argue that the following reasons are sufficiently convincing. The first is that
a life plan can save a waste of time. The other is that planning their life can
organize details and help to succeed in their life. Therefore, i believe that
young people should have the ability to plan and organize.
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Overall Comment: 에세이 전체적으로 핵심적인 내용이 없습니다. Body 1 에서는 necessary things
가 무엇이고, 어떻게 이것이 reduce a lot of waste time 한가요? Body
2 에서도 arrange detail about their goals 가 중요한 이유가
무엇인가요? 미리 준비 할수 있다? Confidence gain 할
수 있다? 본인 논리를 에세이에 꼭 써주세요. |