▶ Your Answer :
According to the
reading passage, the Arles bust is a statue of Julius Caesar. However, the
professor dissents the evidences by saying that they can be easily dismissed. First, the writer contends that the bust has features
that are similar to what is known about Caesar's appearance. On the contrary, the lecturer argues
against this point by mentioning that they are not distinguishing
characteristics since they are shared by many Romans. <- they 같은것 보다, 정확히 어떤characteristics 말하는건가요? Moreover, the
person depicted in the bust is unlike the other contemporary portraits of
Julius Caesar. Second, the author
maintains that the area where the bust was found had a close connection to
Caesar. Nevertheless, the professor rebuts this idea by saying that Arles has
no special connection to Caesar. Rather,
<- transition 해주세요. His subordinate should be depicted as a
true founder of Arles since he is the one who actually set up the colony. Last, the reading
passage claims that the type of white marble used to create the statue shows
that it is a depiction of Caesar. On the other hand, the lecturer casts doubt
on the statement by asserting that the usage of white marble doesn't mean that
it is a depiction of Caeser. Many
artists highly valued the white marble and many wealthy people paid high
commissions for using the material in their arts. <- 이 내용과 Caesar 와 무슨 관련성이 있나요? 연관성있게 point 잡아주세요! Writing 0-30 Score
Scale Fair (17-23) Overall Comment : Body 1,2 에서는 내용적인 측면보다, 기술적인 측면에서 수정 해주세요. Body 3 에서는 내용이 연결이
안됩니다. Wealthy people 이 marble 쓴거랑
Caesar 가 아니다 의 관계에 대해서 더 명확하게 써주세요.
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