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Whether students should take difficult classes in school
or not is a prevalent issue undergoing serious debate. Two different opinions
exist in regard to this topic. After reviewing the opinions from several
perspectives, personally I disagree with the idea that it is important for
students to take difficult classes in school for the following two reasons. It
allows students to reduce creative abilities and to get a lot of stress. To begin with, it
cannot be beneficial to creativity. While many consider that taking
difficult classes enables students to improve their creativity, we cannot deny
the fact that it is hard for them to enhance these abilities without basic
knowledge. To put it frankly, students who do not have element knowledge are
not able to concentrate on these difficult classes and to understand materials
in class fully. For this reason, it does not lead to strong creativity and
then, students will not be able to get a good job opportunity because many
works are required creative thinking in order to cope with complex problems. <- 설명 전에, 너무
어려워서 discouraged 되고, creative 한
idea 를 낼 수 가 없다 순으로 이야기 해보세요~ For
instance, my cousin used to take easy courses in university. Before long, she
was not able to get a lot of job opportunities and because she did not test her
innovate thinking repeatedly in order to promote her creative thinking. On top of that, it
causes people to get a lot of stress. This is because
students are not able to understand contents in difficult classes and they also
feel that they are loser compared to other smart peers. Also, it is -> has a
negative effect on study and participating on other activities because their
confidence and positive thinking is reduced. In addition, for example last
Friday, a well-known professor of Seoul National University published an
editorial and as a result, his study supported my view. He said that while
taking difficult classes, they lose their confidence and it did not arouse them
to actively participate in their work and to do their best. He concluded his
study by saying that this proves to us that it is not necessary for student to
take hard courses and they get stressed out. <- body 1 내용과 비슷한거 같아요. 결국 너무 어렵다는 이야기 가 base 인거 같네요. In conclusion, I believe that it is not vital for students to
take difficult classes because it contributes to reduce creative abilities and
to get a lot of stress. Writing 0-30 Score
Scale Fair (17-23)
Overall Comment: Body 1,2 내용 많이 겹칩니다. 독립된 idea 생각 해보세요. 결국 너무 어려워서 creative thinking 못하고, stress 많이 받는 다는 내용 같아요. 조금 더 확대 해서 설명을
해보세요!
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