▶ Your Answer :
(State the main topic first here) The reading passage The writer argues that the Chinese discovered the
America before Christopher Columbus did. However, the lecturer disagrees
with this claim because of with the following two reasons.
(Briefly present two reasons)
First of all, the lecturer asserts that the old Chinese
map that contains including the
American continent is turned out to be wrong just fake. He convinces that the map was made later because it used
notions that was only used by Westerns. Also, there are some translated
Chinese in the map. This contradicts the writer’s assertion that the Chinese found the America.
Second, the lecturer explains that the existence of Chinese artifacts can’t prove that the Chinese found the America before Columbus. To prove
the hypothesis, there should be far more objects. (What
is that?) For example, the
Viking have clear evidences that they exists had existed in America about 1000 years ago, such as constructions. (What does it indicate?) This counters the writer’s argument that the Chinese discovered the America faster
than Columbus.
Finally, the lecturer shows that the a traditional
Chinese lacquering technique found in Mexico is coincidence. (With what?) There is so much historical coincidence all over the
world. For example, Pyramid is discovered at in Egypt and America resemble
in many points with very
similar shape. This clearly
refutes writer’s claim that the
Columbus discovered the America after Chinese did.
In conclusion, I believe I
have accurately demonstrated my point of view on this matter with two concrete
reasons and evidences. Since views of life and values differ among individuals,
it seems like this perspective will always remain controversial.
채점기준표
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Grammar
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Contents
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Example
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Coherence
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점수
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2
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2
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2
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1
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Score
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Limited 10-15
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