▶ Your Answer : There might be some people who believe that grandparents’ advice is useful to their grandchildren as although society develops. However, I personally disagree with the above idea for the two subsequent reasons. First, due to the development of the society, grandparents’ advices becomes out-dated. Second, grandchildren these days don’t do not have enough time to talk to their grandparents. First of all, it is not useful to get advice from their grandparents. What this means is that Due to the advent of new electronic devices such as personal computers and smart phones, grandchildren can get more useful and latest information very easily. These devices allows grandchildren to be up-to-dated and keep up with today’s society. Let me bring up my personal story as an example. Last year, I was planning to visit the United States, so I needed information about this country. I started searching the internet to obtain the information that I need. Through the Facebook and Twitter, I was able to collect resources that I needed. If I had have got information from my grandparents, I might not have obtained useful information and my trip have been spoiled. (주제는 “조부모의 조언은 (모두) 손자녀에게 유용하지 않다.”에 대한 찬반입니다. 이 문단은 조부모의 “일부” 조언이 해당 주제에 어긋남을 밝히고는 있지만, 조부모의 “모든” 조언이 손자녀에게 유용하지 않다는 것을 주장하는 근거로는 부족합니다.) On the top of that, grandchildren nowadays are too busy to spend their time with their grandparents. (문단의 첫 머리에 문단의 핵심 주장을 정리해주세요.) To be specific, they are much busier due to the competitiveness of today’s society. They spend most their time studying academic subjects and doing homework. As a result, it makes it difficult for grandparents to understand the problems that their grandchildren are facing. According to a study done by JYH Institute of Sociology, it showed that people these days spend less than 1 hours with their family. This is due to the fact that they have a hectic schedule to survive in today’s competitive society. As a result, one of the difficulties that people these day have is that they cannot understand their family members and they have a conflict so often. This clearly shows that grandparents cannot have enough time with their grandchildren. In conclusion, due to the development of technology and insufficient time to spend with their grandparents, it is not a good idea for grandchildren to get advice from their grandparents. In this regard, I strongly believe that grandparents’ advice is not helpful to their grandchildren. Writing 0-30 scale Fair(23-25) TOEFL Writing은 academic writing skill을 측정하는 시험입니다. 따라서 구어체와 비격식적인 표현을 피하고 정확한 영어를 사용해야 합니다. 관사(a/an, the)를 어떤 경우에 어떤 것을 붙이고 어떤 경우에 붙이지 않는지를 확인해보세요. TOEFL writing은 우선적으로 영어 구사 능력을 고려하기는 하지만, 주장을 논리 있게 펼치는 능력도 평가 요소로 작용합니다. 글 전반의 논리적인 전개를 신경 쓰세요. |