▶ Your Answer :
The reading passage contends that lead poisoning was prevailing in ruling classes in of the Roman Empire for the
following the several reasons. On the other hand, the speaker brings up
several points that contradict this argument.
First, the lecturer contends that cosmetics which periodically
used by upper class rarely affected/caused lead poisoning. Actually, the practice was neither healthy nor
harmful. This is because the substance of cosmetics, Cerussa, was not the cause of lead
poisoning as long as they people did not ingest it directly. This casts doubt on the reading passage which states
Roman's cosmetics gave rise to lead poisoning. 읽기지문은 cosmetics가 lead를 포함하고 있다고 주장했나요?
In addition, according to the lecturer, water pipe in the Roman
Empire did not led to the diseases. Although there was risky high possibility to bring about
lead poisoning, mineral in pipe deterred people from coming down with lead
poisoning. (<-how?) As a result, people were less likely to access the lead of
pipe. This counters the reading passage's assertion that lead of water pipe was
one of the main factors of causing lead poisoning through polluting
water.
The final point made by the lecturer is that lead component of
sapa, a lead pot (which was) used to by mixing wine, was a small quantity. Therefore,
it was not severe enough to lead to ailment. This refutes the reading passage's claim
that as aristocracy was drinking wine containing lead deposit from lead pots, they were taken suffered from lead poisoning.
Writing 0–30 score scale
Fair (18-23)
전체적으로 핵심 포인트는 잘 포함하고 있고, reading과
lecturer의 의견도 잘 대조되는데, 구체적인 내용들 일부가 빠져있는 것으로 보입니다. (calcium 등) 문법적으로 큰 문제 없이 잘 쓰셨는데 사소한 부분들까지 신경써주시면 더 좋겠습니다. 수고 많으셨습니다^^ |