■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Sports and social activities deserve the same financial support as classes and libraries. | |
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People often think that spending time on sports and social activities are less important than studying in the classes and the libraries. This belief makes people to put less money on the activities. I believe, however, those activities are more important and deserved the same support as academic facilities for two main reasons: for better future and to study better.
To begin with, focusing only academic field does not guarantee the future success such as getting into a topnotch college or good job. This is because, in the past students can get admission or employment if only they have a great GPA, so schools pour money into the facilities which could help student better grade. However, these days the more you want into good schools or companies the more aspects like relationships, leadership, and health are required. For example, according to the Ministry of Education in 2009, the schools with great reputation like school in the Ivy League value more the student’s personal activities and experiences than resume components such as GPA, SAT scores, or school. Moreover, last year, it shows that there were only less than one percent of student who had only extraordinary scores got enter the school. This implies that sports and social activities become a key to success as much as the intellectual faculty in the past.
In addition, students can study much better by doing physical and social activities. When students want good achievement in class, they tend to concentrate only on study. This easily leads the student to under over pressure and stress out, and even to be mentally unhealthy. However, by doing some exercise and spending time with friend, students can relieve stresses and refresh themselves. Then, it eventually helps students focus on study harder and better again. For instance, in the recent study conducted by Harvard University shows people do their job more effectively when they have a chance to refresh as twice times much. Plus, 90 percent of people in the higher sector who perform better in the group and lead others do exercise regularly. This shows that how important having some activities and it should be regarded prior to the sticking with only books.
In brief, before obtaining knowledge we have to weigh on the others especially sports and social activities for having a great career and actually producing excellent academic output. All in all, it is crucial that put our money on the activities if we consider the enormous effects. | |
이렇게 쓰는데 1시간이 걸렸습니다. 빨리쓴다고 썼는데,, 브래인스토밍한거까지 합하면 더 오바되네요...
30분 재고 쓸때 아웃라인잡는게 시간이 너무 많이 초과되는데 그냥 바로 쓰기들어가서
쓰면서 생각하는게 낳을까요,,,?
지금도 완벽하지 않은데.. 시험에가서 30분안에 쓰려면 로직이나 문장구성 문법적실수가 더 많아질듯하네요..
너무 신참이라 질문이 많습니다.. 실전에서 탭키 쓴느것 가능한지 안돼면 스페이스바 얼마나 쳐야하나요;;;
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