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■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Topic : Young people enjoy life more than older people do. | |
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As the science has been developed, the knowledge people should know is getting bigger and bigger. Some people might say that young people don’t have enough time to enjoy their life since they have to spend most of their time studying it. But I strongly disagree about this opinion with for the following reasons.
To begin with, even though highly developed technology has made a great deal of entertainments, it is too complex for older people to use them. Since young people have more curiosity and flexible brain, they easily adapt to the new technology and learn how to play with it. And that is why most of game companies are targeting more children more than adult. To be more specific, my uncle, who is 45 years old and teacher, usually spend his free time watching television without smile and never tries to do any other things. On the other hand, his two kids, who are 11 and 9 years old, have already started to play computer games and chat with their friends in the virtual world. It is obvious that they will become smarter and can play tons of games their parents never can.
Not only that, young people’s free spiritual spirit makes them released from traditional or religious pressures. In my country, Confucianism asking too much temperance of human had crucially influenced Korean people since more than one thousand years ago. (since를 빼시던가, ago를 빼시던가 하셔야 해요, 같이 쓸수 없습니다.)In these days, however, young people have begun to accept liberalism and realism that let them do whatever they want if they can handle it. For example, older people were not allowed to have sex with his girlfriend or her boyfriend before they marry. Can you imagine that? You cannot have sex until more than 20 years old? Or it could me 40 at worst. (틀린 문장입니다. could 다음에 일반동사 하나를 쓰셔야 하고, 무슨 의미인가요?)
In conclusion, I described why I think young people live funnier than older one. Since they are emotionally free and can use lots of sophisticated entertainments, it is hard to say that older people enjoy their lives more than younger people. | |
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