Many countries are adopting a policy that makes higher education mandatory for(to) all students. Although I agree that it is wise to give opportunities for(to) all students to get higher education, I strongly believe that higher educations should be available only to good(to broad meaning) students. This is not only because smart students only(redundency) have the(a or plural) qualification, but also they will make better atmosphere for studying.
First of all, only the academically talented (students) (should) have the qualification for higher education. (So) As to get higher education appropriately, students need a certain level of background knowledge. However, academically poor students cannot keep up with the curriculum because they will have difficulties to understand the(a) lecture properly. To illustrate this point, a study that researched the correlation between high school marks and academic performance in college,(no comma) showed students who had high marks in high school,(no comma) also have good reputations from professors.
(you don't know how to use comma. I recommend you to read 'the elements of style')
On top of that, smart students improve academic performance of(to) each other. This is mainly because passionate atmosphere is an important factor to study well. Competition and discussion challenge and encourage each other, which leads to better academic performances of all individuals. For instance, when my brother graduated his high school, he went to a middle level (of) university(Konglish). However, he did not study hard and always got bad grades. However, as he transferred to a top university, he started to study harder because of the good atmosphere other students made.
In summary, higher education should be allowed only to good students, because (the) smart students only have the qualification and also they will encourage and challenge each other which leads to higher grades. As these reasons reveal, only good students should be available to higher education.
(Overall, people could have some questions of your idea and its development. It is unclear what you want to say. But you have a strong sense of grammer. Your style is similiar from the material from Song Won. If you finish this writing in limited time, I think you would be get range from 22~25 points. Anyway good luck!) |