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■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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Some people prefer to work for themselves or own a business. Others prefer to work for an employer.
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A lot of controversy exists over whether working for an employer is good or not. Although some people argue argues that being an employer is more beneficial than running one's own business, I strongly believe that advantages of working for themselves are more significant. There are several reasons for this opinion, and I would like to describe two of the most important ones. First, if people work for themselves, they can produce/ achieve take better results. Moreover, they can get a wide range of real work experiences.
Most importantly, by running one's own business, people usually get better results. People usually put in more efforts and are more passionate with their jobs when they are running own business, because they want to make better results. ★because it is directly connected to their salary. 라고 쓰면 더 설득력있지 않을까요 :) On the contrary, it is difficult for people to be satisfied with the tasks working which are executed passively. For example, when I was a high school student, my friends usually made did better jobs on their assignments when they did it personally than when they were part of group members. This is simply because that they had full more responsibility for their work in individual assignments.
Moreover, people can get a variety of knowledge from running a business. attending their work. If people take part in their work directly, then they will have more chances a much greater chance for success. This is due to the fact that learning from experiences and contacting with the real work-world remains is remained longer than experiences from indirect learning. For instance, the Seoul National University in Korea has shown a study that comparest the results between real work experiences and indirect work experiences. According to the study, people are better able to succeed in a higher rate when they are part of their work directly because they have achieved live life knowledge.
In conclusion, I consider that running our own business has a positive influence on our lives, since if people work for themselves,개인사업을 하다. they strive for making better results and attain various experiences. Regardless of what others say, it is more important for people to realize the benefits of working for themselves.
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