eating at home or at food stands or restaurants? |
I know a friend who rarely eats at home. Their family prefers to eat out at restaurants or fast food places rather than eating home-made food. However my family does not eat out unless it's a special occasion. Since I have been taught this way in my family, I disapprove eating out for several reasons.
~unless it's a special occasion.~ 보다는 가주어 식으로 ~there's a special occasion~으로 해주시는게 좋을듯. 그리고 contraction은요, 구어체에서 자주 쓰이는 것이기 때문에 에세이에선 불필요합니다. 빼서 there is 로 바꿔주세요.
~disapprove~ 음.. 인증하지 않는다는 뜻인가요? ~disagree~가 좋을듯.
The main reason is that food that is served at restaurants and food stands are not always nutritious or sanitary. To make the food taste good and look delicious, the cooks and the owners of the restaurants usually put artificial flavor and color in some of the food. Also, there may be too much grease or salt in the food, which can make the food tasty but can be bring no positive efects to your health.
~can be bring no positive efects ~ be동사+동사 원형? 수동태를 쓰시려는 거였다면, 과거 분사형의 동사를 써주셔야죠. ~can be brought ~이 될텐데, however, 저는 ~can not bring positive effects~로 바꾸시는게 좋습니다. 일단, 문장에서 콤마(,) 로 두가지를 contrast 비교 하는 것이기 때문에, 하나는 부정문을 써서 해주시는게 대조적인 느낌을 살려주거든요.
The second reason I like eating at home is because I can save more money that way. This does not apply to food stands, which sell very cheap food, but in the case of restaurants, the food is more expensive than cooking my own meal at home. In restaurants, fee for service is also included in your bill so it is usually more pricey. Buying ingredients from the supermarket and making your own food is more economical beacuse you can always keep the leftover ingredients in the refrigerator and use them later on.
~fee for service~ -> ~tip~ ^ㅡ^ just in case!! 문화에 관련된 용어로 써주시는게 좋겠죠?
~leftover ingredients~ 말그대로 ingredients는 무언가 만드는데 들어간 것들입니다.. 뭐랄까.. 좀 더 성분이라는 의미가 강한것 같아요. ~food~로 그냥 해주시는게 의미전달상 좋을듯.
The last and most important reason I think eating at home is better is because you can enjoy time with yout family while eating meals together. When all the family is seated around the table and are sharing some delicious food that my mother has generouslly prepared, family members seem to grow more close to each other and are at a very relaxed state. Dinner time with family is a very important time in the day because I don't see much of my family during the day so meal time is the best time to tell the news of the day or make announcements.
~all the family is seated ~ all 을 써주셨는데 단수가 나오니 어색하죠. ~ all the family memebers are seated~ 로 해주세요.
~very relaxed state~ 안정적인 상태는 ~ very relaxed condition~ 으로 해주세요. state는 좀더 '사정'이라는 의미가 강합니다.
Eating out can be more convenient because you can save a lot of time and energy that takes to prepare a meal at home. However, I think that the disadvantages far weigh out the advantages of eating out at food stands or restaurants.
이상입니다. ^ㅡ^ 플로리다를 다녀왔는데 엄~청 밀려있네요;
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