Attitudes conflict on whether young children need government investment rather than college students. I stand for proponents of the view that government should invest on young children. First, people show outstanding effectiveness in improving social skills when they are taught young. Second, funding young children enables them to cultivate their aptitudes.
Fundamentally,
young children show outstanding effectiveness in improving social skills. The
opposing side argues that college students need government investment more than young children. Advocates of this school
of thought raise several arguments but it does they
do not withstand vigorous scrutiny. While their argumentation may appear
valid on the surface, it does not withstand vigorous scrutiny. (같은 말을 너무 반복하세요.) Actually, a flood of evidence renders their views
erroneous. For instance, my particular observation reveals why young children
need government investment more than college students do. It is more effective
to teach young children to improve social skills. The modern
society admittedly requires people who surpass others both in specialty and
sociability. To be more specific, interpersonal relationships and social skills
are necessary qualifications for any successful person. To be more specific, it
is essential for anyone to learn how to integrate well with others and maintain
strong relationships. Therefore, given the need for collaboration today,
investing to in young children clearly is
more beneficial in building a more promising future. This supports the
thesis that . (문장이 끊겼네요.)
In the
second place, investing to young kids enables them to cultivate their
aptitudes. Beyond my personal experience, a current research substantiates my perspective. Apart
from a small portion of people who sided with the opposite idea, a significant
majority of survey (again, 누가 진행한 설문조사인지 명시하세요) participants endorsed my
point of view that it is not college students who need government investment. An elementary school kid's mother said on the survey
that children nowadays are living in a world of meritocracy where only
extremely talented people can survive. Consequently, many children suffer
physically and mentally from tight schedules and highly competitive
environments. In the long run, they cannot but miss chances to delve into
numerous issues for self-improvement. This explains why it is better for
children to be invested from when they are young in honing potentials that
could have been overlooked. Such notions attest that it is better for
government to invest to in young
children.
Ultimately,
the government needs
to invest to in young kids for the
evidence I have provided previously. First and foremost, government's
investment enables young children to effectively improve their social
skills. Last but not least, young kids can cultivate their aptitudes by
government investment.
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