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Undoubtedly, risks play a significant role in people’s
daily lives in many of the places where they work or play. Some people think a
person who plans well and works carefully is more likely to succeed than a
person who takes risks while other do not believe this. Both sides have their
own reasons to support their views. If I were asked to choose one, I would say
that taking a risk makes people succeed compared to meticulous plans do.
There are several reasons as follows.
To begin with, when people face risky conditions and
overcome these, it allows them to achieve their goals. Many achievers always go
through dangerous situations for their works to accomplish their goals.
Surmounting these hazard situations is plausible to enable people to put in
more efforts. For example, when my cousin was in college, she often felt
depressed thinking that her life became an exhausting routine. The reason was
that she was majoring in swimming, but her right leg got broken by an accident.
Moreover, her father passed away during work in reconstruction sites, so her
family was mired in economic plight. However, she did not give up: she not only
exercised for recovering her leg every day, but also had three part-time jobs
to keep sustenance such as serving in a restaurant and café and delivering milks in every morning. By getting over such risks,
she was able to swim again, become a good athlete in South Korea, and get the
first prize in the national swimming contest. Many people around her consider
her a really successful person, allowing her to be confident, strong, and
optimistic.
In addition, a risky event is sometimes a chance to
succeed. In the course of success, people encounter an unexpected dangerous
situation, which a turning point is needed to
succeed simultaneously. If they lose this chance, this is likely to cause them
to fail to obtain their purpose. To illustrate, my father was a president in a
luxurious Italian restaurant in my town. My town was located in a rural area of
South Korea, so many people told him that the idea to open this restaurant in
the town was really dangerous. This was because there was no such expensive
restaurant in the town. Nevertheless, he decided to challenge the hazard
condition, and fortunately, many people in the town liked and visited his
restaurant. Most of people said that no such high-grade restaurant was built
nearby the town, so they loved to go to the restaurant. It means that his
restaurant was able to be famous due to non-existence of expensive restaurants.
He was able to earn a lot of money and make franchises all around the city.
Without getting such chance, he has would have
fallen behind.
All things considered, the advantages of experiencing
risky events far outweigh those of planning punctilious schedules for the
reasons I have mentioned above. All in all, encountering risks cannot be underestimated in the pursuit of success in life.
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