Some people might think that it is not a good idea to make employees
participate in the process about decision making. However, I personally agree
with the above proposition that management
should allow workers to present their own idea, because there are two reasons.
First, it can make employees to have loyalty to the
company and the other reason is that this process will be able to
increase sales.
To begin with, if employees cannot enter the step of decision making and
they should do just just do simple work
as their own job, they will not be satisfied in their work environments and
they would feel that they
have become machines themselves a machine. On the other hand, if they are able to argue their thinking thoughts about some issues,
and they are going to would feel
that they are really are members of their
company and it will lead on making a deepen
their loyalty to their corporation. Ultimately this positive effect can
be indicated as a high productivity. There is a material (survey든 research든 다른 표현을 사용하세요.) conducted by a consulting enterprise. The purpose of this material
was to determine that whether decision
making with more employees could affect their
productivity. The investigators researched this effect in two enterprises. The first company implemented getting employees to
attend allowed its employees to participate in
decision making and the other company did not. After 6 months, the researchers
concluded that, in the former company, they had double outcome the outcome doubled compared with that of the past,
while in the latter enterprise, they had just a
little fluctuation in productivity. And a worker of the former answered that
the loyalty to his company was made deepened
and it applied led to high
performance.
On top of that, the more ideas can make
the bring more positive effect in sales. It
has the same meaning with Brain-Storming. To be
specific, we can get a better concept through combining
the ideas of many workers. I will give you my personal experience as an
example. When I worked in my previous job, I could
insist suggested an idea to make a mobile
app to manage laborers who worked at a
construction site, because the compliance with safety regulation was a factor
of evaluation items from contractors. After making this app, the project
of increasing the rate of safety observance was
successful and we could not only get a high
score from the contractor’s grading, but also
make more contracts with them.
To sum up, if an owner of a company decides to
make his employees
participate in decision making, company he
can get loyalty from his workers and high productivity, and also earn more
money. In this sense, I strongly believe companies
must have this policy.
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