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In the reading passage, there is ample support for the author's claim that humpback whales magage to migrate long distance, with by navigating by using the stars. and There are few reasons for humpback whales makes this an unusual possibility. However, the professor in the lecture gives several reasons as a rebuttal to the author's point.
First, the professor contends that there is no connection between their the whales' (단락의 첫째줄에서는 대명사/소유대명사를 쓰지 말아주세요) intelligence and the behavior to use stars (조금 어색한 표현입니다, and using stars for navigation). This is because some birds use this methods too., He with giving gives an example of specific bird species, ducks. (This is because some birds such as ducks use this method as well) Consequently it (it이 무엇인지 알 수 없습니다, 여기에서 it은 this method에 가장 가깝습니다) is not persuasive and this functionality (어색한 표현입니다 - behavior) does not make humpback whales special. This casts doubt on the reading passage's claim that they are too smart to use stars to navigate by.
Next, the professor insists that animals have to be to migrate (비문: have to be 다음에 형용사, 동사+ing를 넣어주세요). He said that there are magnetic fields around the earth. Some species have specific organ 'magnetite' in their body so that it enables for them to sense sensible to the magnetic fields in earth. As a result, these species are likely to use this organs to navigate rather than using stars. This counters the reading passage's assertion that animals are able to keep movement in a straight direction for long distances, provided that they orient themselves by some external objects or potentials.(본문의 내용을 그대로 가져오면 안됩니다)
Finally, the professor argues that spy-hopping has nothing to do with this activity (첫 문장에서는 어떤 활동인지 구체적으로 말씀해주셔야 합니다) activities. He gives an example of some sharks that would watch upward (위쪽을 쳐다보다 - look upward) for hunting. So the purpose of spy-hopping is not to see stars. This refutes the reading passage's suggestion that humpback whales show an unusual behavior such as floating straight up for minutes at once, their heads above the water as though they were looking upward.
Score: 15 Comments: - 단락의 첫번째 줄에서는 대명사, this, such 등의 단어를 쓰지 않도록 해주세요.
- 전체적으로 주요 포인트를 잘 잡아주셨습니다. - 문법 실수가 있습니다. - 어색한 표현이 있습니다. - 최대한 본문의 내용을 그대로 반복하지 않도록 노력해주세요 - 두번째 단락은 내용 전달이 충분하지 않습니다. 둘이 완전히 대조가 되지 않기 때문에 더 정확한 설명과 비교가 필요해보입니다. - 첨삭이 늦어져서 죄송합니다. 좋은 결과 있으시길 바라겠습니다!
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