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Some people thinks that having
in-depth knowledge is better than having a wide
array of abilities. However, in my opinion, there should be more emphasize
emphasis (emphasize는 동사이고, emphasis가 명사입니다) on a
wide variety of abilities and knowledges.
There are two reasons why. First, in this world, having a wide variety of knowledge is more useful in real life. Second, to
survive in this world of endless competition, it is required for people to have
various experiences.
To begin with, in this world we live in,
having a wide variety of knowledge is more
useful than having a deep knowledge of one
specific field. To be specific, a person with various and sufficient knowledge is
regarded as 'a person of intellect' in this world, while others who lack
knowledge don’t are simply ignored. For
example, when I was in high school, a teacher
gave us a team project assignment about 'the
traditional art form of Korea'. One of my team members
was famous for his superior academic performance, so I expected to him will
to be a good team
member. However, it was revealed that he knew nothing about the Korean
art, due to the fact that he was only interested in Math and Science and he does
did not have any interest to on the topic of the project. Thus, he could not do his
role in team project and as a result, I should had
to do his work instead of him.
On top of that, having a wide variety of
abilities and experience is helpful to people in their future career. To
explain, having a lot of experience is an
essential factor to success succeed in
this society. Imagine the people who only have text book knowledge. Their
view will be so narrow. We should not only gain various experience but also
broaden our perspective to the world. For example, the a survey was conducted
by the EAP Korea, (EAP가 무엇의 약자인지 적으세요) with current employers as
respondents. This survey was organized to
understand what which abilities are
wanted from companies. The majority of
respondents responded that having various
experience is the most essential factor as an
employee. An overwhelming 70% of respondents emphasized the importance of
experience. The reasons were mainly concerned with the
fact that employees who have had various experience is are more likely to adapt to the working environment
well and dealing deal with many kinds of
problems well.
To sum up, taking the fact that a wide
variety of knowledge is more useful in real life and this society wants people who have various experience into
consideration, I firmly believe that the importance of wide variety of
abilities cannot be underestimated.
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