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Some people think that personal effort is the an essential factor to save the environment. However,
in my opinion, the advantage of individual
endeavor is so small that it can be easily clouded by the other problems. There
are two issues that we have to consider: the government's
policy and the world's effort.
To begin with, even if individuals
put a lot of effort to save the environment, it would not have any significant
outcome unless the government policy supports
this. I admit that personal behavior to save the environement environment such as distributing the trash and save
saving water are needed,
but this kind of small effect can be nothing if the government made a huge failure on the environmental policy. In Korea, the
a previous president, the Myeong Bak Lee
put his spirit in the four major river development project. His intention was
that if we develop the rivers, than then many
vessels can be used as transportation system and it will higer heighten the economic growth of my country.
Although there was many concerns that it will destroy the environment, he just
continued the policy. As a result, the water became green, and countless fishes
which were living there are dead died because
of polluted water. Many environmental specialists say that the money required
to get the river to recover is myriad. Although
Korean people are very accustomed to the environmental issues, this shows that
the environment can be easily disrupted by the government's
ridiculous policy.
On the top of that, as we are living in the world of
globalization, all the countries in the world should
work on the environmental problems rather
than persons themselves. Suppose that your country is working hard to realize
the environmental-friendly society but all the other countries only focus on
their economic issues and not on the environmental ones. The world will be so
contaminated. As our world is connected reciprocally, all the world
should focus on the environmental issues. Recently, air in my country became so
bad and that people cannot go out without their masks on. This was
due to the air pollution from Chinese factories coming to my country and also to my country's internal waste. In the
An article concerning this problem said that the
cause is 50 to 50. In other words, even if my country reduced the amount of waste internally, it cannot be 100% clean
as the past. So this is the reason why all the world should work out in
the environmental issues.
To sum up, considering the importance of governmental interference and world's endeavor, I firmly hold the
belief that individual behavior cannot alleviate the environmental problems just by itself.
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