▶ Your Answer :
Undoubtedly,
energy plays a in significant role in modern society. Some people advocate that
the most effective method for government to encourage energy conservation is to
raise the price of gasoline and electricity, while others do not. If I were
asked to choose one, I would say that I disagree with pricing policy. There are
several reasons as follows. ^
First
of all, increasing the price of energy resource has negative impacts on people’s
life. To be specific, most of energy resources used by ordinary people are
gasoline and electricity. If the cost of these types of energy will increase,
it will be big financial burden to many people since they have to use their car
or home appliances as necessity. In my country, there were black out frequently
in summer seasons due to high demand on electricity. To solve this problem,
governments raised electricity price without consensus in public opinion. After
that, many people disagreed with government’s action because it was not
a fundamental solution and it led to big financial burden. Due to strong
opposition, the price was set to original and energy conservation failed would fail. Therefore,
change in the price of energy resource is not the best method for energy
conservation. ^
In
addition, there are many other solutions to reserve energy. The reasons why
government conserves energy are limitation of resource and environment conservation.
However, with advancements in technology, there are many methods to obtain
energy such as solar or hydrogen energy which are not harmful to environment as
well as can be used permanently. Many research teams, including Seoul National
University, showed that gasoline will be replaced with hydrogen energy within 20
years all over the world and it will be more reasonable and effective due to
its abundance. Also, solar energy is infinite to use and it will be the best
resource in the future. Hence, government should encourage scientists to commercialize
new energy resource in order to get plentiful energy. ^
All
things considered, I strongly believe that the raising the cost of gasoline and
electricity is not the most effective solution for government to encourage energy
conservation for the reasons I have mentioned above. All in all, it is
important for government to improve new energy source for the future life.
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첫번째 본문 -명사 앞에 관사 -would fail은 미래형입니다. 문맥상 과거이므로 failed로 바꿔주세요. 두번째 본문 -가솔린은 대체될것이다의 수동태의 구문이므로 be p.p형태에 맞게 써주셔야 문맥상 잘 어울립니다. -its를 씀으로써 좀더 명확성을 높여주세요.
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