The twentieth century saw great change. In your opinion, what is one change that should be remembered about this century? Give specific reasons and details to explain your choice.
From 1901 to 2000 had people lived drastically volatile life. There were immense changes. Some were good while others were tragic. In my opinion, I should say people must remember the development of industry in that not only our generation but next generations yet to come could learn painful lessons for future.
During twentieth century, I think, advancement of industry burst out drastically. We were happy at first using convenient facilities such as automobiles instead of horses or carts, fridges and air conditioners. However, these profitable facilities were came out to be troublesome after a few years later. For example, the worst tragic of the output was London Smog, outbroke in London, England. With this awful event, countless people were suffered and died with deadful respiratory diseases by noxious gases and dust emitted from such automobiles as trucks, cars and buses. How tearlike it is. For another example, fridges and air-conditioning are now may no longer be used in the near future, said scientists. They say that these facilities cause CFCs, which flow up to the sky and destory the ozone layers, which in turn lets catastrophoic sun rays shine on the surface of the Earth, and, finally, some of the living creatures become abnormal, so do their offsprings. Even worse, because the CFC gases take nearly 10 years to reach the ozones, by the time we notice and stop useing them, it will be too late. According to these tragics and warnings, we should take lessons from them neither we are to be suffered nor make them occur ever again. Of what use is it to advance, were we to go back to start our lives from the beginning? All in all, both us and our children have to remember the result of the side effect of industrialization for the idea that painful past offers us all lessons for tomorrow.
Finally, in the twentieth, people saw great changes. As far as I am concerned, industrialization was one of them, sending a clear message: the dark aspects of history must never happen again.
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