▶ Your Answer :
There might be some people who do not believe that there is no
reason to be impolite, regardless of circumstances. However I personally
disagree with the above idea for two subsequent reasons. First, an impolite person can be stressed out. Also,
Politeness will cause more good better
relationships.
First, people nowadays are living a hectic and busy life so that they are stressed
out. Moreover impoliteness of attitude can make
even more stress more because many people
will evade the impolite person. As a result, he will be lonely and eventually he will be stressful. Stress is
known to be a major factor that keeps us from being healthy and many people are
suffering from various mental problems such as
depression and nervous breakdown. Let me bring up my personal story as an
example. When I was a little child, my father is was an impolite
person. So many people do did not want to keep in touch with my father so that
he became alone. At that time, my father was falling fell in alcohol, and received
the stress. Finally, he suicided committed
suicide because of depression.
Secondly, we cannot anticipate our future so that we have to be always polite, because politeness will bring good relationship. It
is important to maintain good relationships with other people, because we never
know what's going to happen in the future. Decisions made by other people can
sometimes affect our life, and such decisions are usually based on personal and
sentimental reasons. According to a study done by EEC institute of phycology,
80 percent (80 percent of how many people?) of
respondents said that polite people can deal with any situation well. And the
researcher analyzed that how they can deal with any situation well. the
reason is people who around the polite people are like them.
In conclusion, politeness provides not only good relationships but also to relieves
stress. For these reasons, I strongly disagree that regardless of
circumstances, there is no reason to be impolite.
Writing
0-30 Score Scale |
Fair (17-23) |
Score |
23 |
Overall
Comment: |
Good. 가장 자주 하시는 실수는
comma와 period 사용에 관한 것들입니다. 문장을 끊어줘야 할 타이밍에 이어가고, 이어가야 할 타이밍에 period로 끊어주실 때가
있었어요. 문법 오류들은 위 지적사항들을 참고하시길 바랍니다. |
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