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Some people think that they attend college for new
experiences or increased knowledge. These reasons are nice but such things are
just detailed reasons about the
main reason. I think the
main reason about attending college or university is for career preparation.
This is because in college, students could learn more specific details about their future career and they also could become expertise
experts in their major.
First, most students attend college and choose their major for their future job which they want to do. This
is because many companies require people to graduate university or college
diploma. For example, five years ago, my sister went to college and she learned about music education to become
a music teacher. This is because to become a public school teacher, people
could get the license only after
graduating from university.
Now, she is finally working in a
public school as a music teacher. Without her college diploma, it would have been
impossible for her to get her job now.
Second, students could become an expertise experts through studying a specific field in college. In middle school and high
school, all students learn the
same required classes. However, in college, students can choose and learn about
particular areas in depth. And there
are highly qualified professors who can give them the best directions. So after
they graduate from university, they could become expertise experts in their field. Therefore, they could enter companies easier than people who do not graduate college.
To sum up, many university or college students attend
college for their career preparation. Also, through colleges, students could be
professional in their major. For these reasons, I strongly believe that
students should go to colleges or
universities for their future job.
Writing
0-30 Score Scale |
Good (24-30) |
Score |
25 |
Overall
Comment: |
예시가 적절하고 논리적으로 잘
쓰셨습니다. 다만 문법 오류들이 좀 있어서 감점을 조금 드렸어요. Expertise = 전문성 experts = 전문가 참고하시길
바랍니다. 위 지적사항들을 확인하세요. |
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