A substantial number of
people argue that universities do not have to expend as much assets on sports
as they do on libraries. However, in my opinion, universities have to invest as
much money on sports as they currently do on libraries. This is because sports
facilities would help university students’ campus life, and famous sports
players or well-trained sports teams will
develop the university’s status.
To begin with, well
organized sports facilities can upgrade the quality of the university students’
campus life. This is mainly because students can enjoy their free time and relieve their stress while playing
sports in the brand new sports complex, and they can easily get along with
other students. Therefore, these will help the students improve their university
life. According to the survey conducted by Seoul National University in 2012,
almost 100% of 1,000 respondents answered that what they need most is was a sports complex. Also, one of these respondents
mentioned that the state of the art sports complex can be the landmark of the
university, and students can get more sound bodies
than ever before. The student then mentioned
that the sound body will positively affect their work. This implies that sports
facilities can benefit university students in many ways.
On top of that, well
known sports stars or strong sports teams would improve the university’s
reputation. The rationale behind this is that people are always interested in
famous sports stars, and the university having good players will benefit in
various ways. For instance, the university soccer team in my university
did not have good soccer players, so it could not attract high school students
who were considering which university to apply to.
To fascinate these high school students, the university scouted two world
famous soccer players by spending a lot of
money. This attracted many high school students, and this resulted that in more than
53,000 people applied applying in the
university in the following year. Moreover, thanks to the two player’s
achievement, the team became a champion of the 8th University soccer league
held in 2015. It played an important role in improving the university’s status,
since many people in Korea became interested in my school even they were not in
the last previous year. As this example
demonstrates, celebrated sports stars or teams would upgrade the university’s
reputation.
To sum up, sports facilities would benefit students’ campus life, and
famous sports players or teams would play an important role in increasing the
university’s reputation. In this regard, I strongly agree with the statements that universities have to invest as much money
on sports as they currently do on libraries.
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