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In most countries, college education is regarded as a prerequisite for
success, enabling one to earn money and honor. However, from the
perspective of a senior in a college, I believe it is not the a prominent factor for one's life to flourish for
three reasons.
To begin with, cost-efficiency is the primary ground for my
thesis. College students in Korea have to pay more than 5000
dollars per a semester. In total, at least 40,000
dollars. However, when they get the a job,
they get less salary than the workers of same age who did not attend the high
college-level education and got their jobs
immediately after the graduation of high schools graduating high school. As the sophisticated education does not
guarantee more wage, I think it is not an essential determinant for success in
life.
Secondly, what students have learned in college is often useless in their
career. Liberal arts majors like philosophy and anthropology do not
assist students to obtain a high-wage job unless they continue with their Ph.D program in schools. Even
if there are majors useful for having professional
occupations like economy or engineering, these subjects can be learned without the
enrollment. For instance, OCW, a complimentary Open
Courseware program, enables the public to study the academic
subjects. By taking OCW courses, people can get
professional knowledge of medicine, economy, and so on, without enrollinng
enrolling in colleges. As there is an
alternative for university education, it is not a crucial factor for
one's professional career.
For the third reasons, contrary to the convention of old days,
nowadays, the scholastic superiority does not guarantee social honor. In
the past, as there are were not much
many high school graduates advancing to higher
education, the scarcity of bachelor's degree was greater. However, in the
present, as numerous students apply for university and the number of it has
been augmented for a long period of time, there are numerous alumni having the
degrees, making the scarcity lower than before.
Due to cost-ineffectiveness and decreased value of the degree and the
existence of alternatives, in these days, university education became the
factor irrelevant to one's success. I would like to advise high
school students to get a job immediately after the graduation so that
they do not waste their time and money.
Writing
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Good (24-30) |
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27 |
Overall
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